Just trying to improve on the original. No compositional changes other than making sure none of the plants are placed on the water. Most of the changes are due to lighting and some materials tweaks, such as the grass which was opaque in the original but now they are translucent. Feedback is greatly appreciated. Gotta say, I am loving Bryce 7 so far.
The original file for camparison...
Having had the opportuinty to look at one of your scenes and seen how increadibly complex they are I find it quite hard to be critical about them since I know how long the changes take to apply. That being said, I will try...
Good things are scale and lighting. Very good indeed.
Less good, is that the foliage feels a little too solid, stodgey almost. I don't know if this is down to material choices or some aspect of the lighting. It has a "storybook" effect, that is, it feels more like a painting than a photograph. That may or may not be a bad thing, depending on if that was the effect you will looking for?
The water is fine so long as I don't look at the point where it joins the ground. This may be because I find the ground material a little bit too much like glazed pottery than the kind of thing I'd expect to find plants growing out of. Essentally I find it a little too uniform against what is going on around it. In other circumstances this would be acceptable, but by creating such a detailed scene, you have made a rod for your own back in more ways than one.
Composition is very good, the only criticism I have is that I feel like I am at a high vantage point when I consider the trees at the back but not so much when looking down at the grass (which looks excellent).
Shadows under the trees are possibly a bit too dark if realims was your intention.
Still I'm only being hypercritical and you know that. 5/5
Join Date: 05.26.2004 Comments: 4496
Again, I find myself agreeing in parts with David and less in others. Since I had the opportunity to play with this scene, I know that it is a complete spot of a place, fit for a panorama, which I enjoyed to make. There are still many spots that could be focused on. The trees are excellent and hardly recognisable as Bryce trees. This alone merits full marks. From this vantage point, the water closest should exhibit a bit more transparency. It is rather shallow here and I'd expect to see the ground. The rock appears floating. The weekest point is indeed the bank. A tad of cutting the terrain would have probably helped but most probably very difficult to accomplish. It appears as if this would lead into a swamp, but then the flowers would be wrong. You coud, of course, argue that there was heavy rain yesterday and there's more water than there usually is and we had to accept this rationale.